Thanks, Kelsey! It wasn’t written that way until I recorded it. I’m looking at it on the screen, I thought they should be on separate lines. (If that’s what you mean?) 😉
I could feel that asthma attack. I have asthma and when I noticed it I could breathe in but not out. I felt like I was sucking air and that's it. Love your start to the story. 'Berta
Wahhh.. this is going to be so good! Such a fantastic and vivid first chapter Julie. My son has asthma, we've done blue lips, purple face, inhalers the works, you wrote this brilliantly! 🙌🏽
Wow! What a great first chapter. I felt each gasp for air as if it was my own, and I don’t have asthma! Looking forward to trying this “slow read” thing.
Thanks, Adam! I'm grateful for your read. I've fallen behind on yours, much to my chagrin. Will catch up, promise! I read about the caffeine. . . wouldn't stand by it in a crisis, tho.
Wow! What a compelling start to your novel, Julie. You have such a gift for description and phrasing your prose in a way that at some points can feel like poetry in its immediacy. Out of the gate you've rendered such a fully-realized character in Grace. I can't wait to see how her story will unfold. Bravo!
Awww, thanks, Ben! Your support and encouragement mean a lot to me, truly. It’s good to hear that Grace comes across fully. As they say, she’s “going through some things.” 😬
The structure of that ending! YES! <3 <3
Thanks, Kelsey! It wasn’t written that way until I recorded it. I’m looking at it on the screen, I thought they should be on separate lines. (If that’s what you mean?) 😉
Separate lines and also they get narrower like her windpipe on the way down...🫁
I could feel that asthma attack. I have asthma and when I noticed it I could breathe in but not out. I felt like I was sucking air and that's it. Love your start to the story. 'Berta
Oh dear! Maybe that chapter should come with a trigger warning. 😮💨 Thanks for reading.
Sorry about that. When I noticed I had asthma was back in the 70s. I was fine reading your story. That’s a little funny.
Ah! Now I understand. Phew!
Wahhh.. this is going to be so good! Such a fantastic and vivid first chapter Julie. My son has asthma, we've done blue lips, purple face, inhalers the works, you wrote this brilliantly! 🙌🏽
Ahhh, so sorry you’ve had that experience. Same here, when mine was younger. Scary! Thanks for reading, glad you enjoyed it.
Wow! What a great first chapter. I felt each gasp for air as if it was my own, and I don’t have asthma! Looking forward to trying this “slow read” thing.
Thanks for trying it, Sally. Glad you enjoyed it. I was gasping a little recording it. 😬
I’m excited for the/your journey. Welcome to the serialization team. 😆 very strong images on the collapse at the end.
As someone who had asthma in his youth, I never knew caffeine helped. That would have been nice to know.
Thanks, Adam! I'm grateful for your read. I've fallen behind on yours, much to my chagrin. Will catch up, promise! I read about the caffeine. . . wouldn't stand by it in a crisis, tho.
Wow! What a compelling start to your novel, Julie. You have such a gift for description and phrasing your prose in a way that at some points can feel like poetry in its immediacy. Out of the gate you've rendered such a fully-realized character in Grace. I can't wait to see how her story will unfold. Bravo!
Awww, thanks, Ben! Your support and encouragement mean a lot to me, truly. It’s good to hear that Grace comes across fully. As they say, she’s “going through some things.” 😬
I was out of breath by the end of the chapter!!
Off to a brilliant start, Julie ☺️
😮💨😉 Thanks for reading!
I’ve saved this when I can devote my attention fully but just want to start by saying congrats on the start!! Excited to read this, Julie.
Thanks so much, Kate. It’s funny - that’s how I ended up reading yours, saving up and binging several chapter together. 😊
Wow. Such a great opening Julie! And I love how the tension of the plot is already illustrated so viscerally in Grace’s body. So excited for more!
Thanks for sharing that, Kimberly. 😊
Great start! Having suffered several asthma attacks like Grace’s, I can vouch for how well and realistically you painted that scene!
Feels weird to say, “oh, good,” about something so awful. . . .😬 Thanks for reading!
Yes yes yes! I'm so excited she's here. Cannot wait for the next chapter! Off to a breathless start!
<cough hack wheeze> 😂 Thanks for everything, Mary Beth! Would not be here w/o you.
Wow! What a start!
🙌 Thanks for reading, Sal. 😊
Start from the beginning which is right in the middle of morning waiting to dawn and the senses overwhelming with all that ignites as methane boils.
Thanks for being here, Stacy!