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The structure of that ending! YES! <3 <3

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Thanks, Kelsey! It wasn’t written that way until I recorded it. I’m looking at it on the screen, I thought they should be on separate lines. (If that’s what you mean?) 😉

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Separate lines and also they get narrower like her windpipe on the way down...🫁

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I could feel that asthma attack. I have asthma and when I noticed it I could breathe in but not out. I felt like I was sucking air and that's it. Love your start to the story. 'Berta

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Oh dear! Maybe that chapter should come with a trigger warning. 😮‍💨 Thanks for reading.

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Sorry about that. When I noticed I had asthma was back in the 70s. I was fine reading your story. That’s a little funny.

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Ah! Now I understand. Phew!

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Wahhh.. this is going to be so good! Such a fantastic and vivid first chapter Julie. My son has asthma, we've done blue lips, purple face, inhalers the works, you wrote this brilliantly! 🙌🏽

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Ahhh, so sorry you’ve had that experience. Same here, when mine was younger. Scary! Thanks for reading, glad you enjoyed it.

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Wow! What a great first chapter. I felt each gasp for air as if it was my own, and I don’t have asthma! Looking forward to trying this “slow read” thing.

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Thanks for trying it, Sally. Glad you enjoyed it. I was gasping a little recording it. 😬

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I’m excited for the/your journey. Welcome to the serialization team. 😆 very strong images on the collapse at the end.

As someone who had asthma in his youth, I never knew caffeine helped. That would have been nice to know.

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Thanks, Adam! I'm grateful for your read. I've fallen behind on yours, much to my chagrin. Will catch up, promise! I read about the caffeine. . . wouldn't stand by it in a crisis, tho.

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Wow! What a compelling start to your novel, Julie. You have such a gift for description and phrasing your prose in a way that at some points can feel like poetry in its immediacy. Out of the gate you've rendered such a fully-realized character in Grace. I can't wait to see how her story will unfold. Bravo!

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Awww, thanks, Ben! Your support and encouragement mean a lot to me, truly. It’s good to hear that Grace comes across fully. As they say, she’s “going through some things.” 😬

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I was out of breath by the end of the chapter!!

Off to a brilliant start, Julie ☺️

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😮‍💨😉 Thanks for reading!

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I’ve saved this when I can devote my attention fully but just want to start by saying congrats on the start!! Excited to read this, Julie.

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Thanks so much, Kate. It’s funny - that’s how I ended up reading yours, saving up and binging several chapter together. 😊

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Wow. Such a great opening Julie! And I love how the tension of the plot is already illustrated so viscerally in Grace’s body. So excited for more!

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Thanks for sharing that, Kimberly. 😊

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Great start! Having suffered several asthma attacks like Grace’s, I can vouch for how well and realistically you painted that scene!

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Feels weird to say, “oh, good,” about something so awful. . . .😬 Thanks for reading!

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Yes yes yes! I'm so excited she's here. Cannot wait for the next chapter! Off to a breathless start!

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<cough hack wheeze> 😂 Thanks for everything, Mary Beth! Would not be here w/o you.

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Wow! What a start!

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🙌 Thanks for reading, Sal. 😊

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Start from the beginning which is right in the middle of morning waiting to dawn and the senses overwhelming with all that ignites as methane boils.

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Thanks for being here, Stacy!

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